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Saturday, November 16, 2013

WeWriWa - One Scared Momma


Welcome to another installment in the fantastic, exciting, and ever brilliant Weekend Writing Warriors snippets extravaganza!  If you happened upon this humble blog by chance, and want to know who else is involved, and how you can also partake in the fun, please, by all means, click this here link!  The skinny is this...writer's from all over the world, post eight sentences from their published works, or works in progress each and every Sunday.  Then they read each other's splendiferous words, sometimes they laugh, sometimes they cry, and at times read stuff that scares the bejeezus out of them.  A few of those fantastic writer's words are hot stuff, so you might want to keep a fan handy!  They also post words of encouragement, ask questions, offer ideas or gentle critique. 
Okay, so this week I'm continuing on with Ravyn and Ena.  If you remember, we left Ena pondering the girl before her, and the explanations she's been given.  I've been creative with punctuation, which is probably pretty obvious.
 
“How long will this journey take you?”

Ravyn noticed the smoke from the dragon’s nostrils had decreased to a slim plume.  “...I have to get to Aigerach first, and well, you have rather destroyed my transportation.  It’s going to take me a week at least to put together a seaworthy raft to get me across that channel.  A half day of sailing, I’d guess, then it’ll probably take a month or so to cross over the land to get to Veris.  How long till your egg hatches?”

“Over a month, as long as it’s kept warm--this aunt of yours stole it for blood, you think?  Who knows if my baby still lives,” Ena began to sob, hiccupping a puff of smoke.
 
Oh, my.  Don't you just want to give that momma dragon some loving?  Poor girl...
 
Since we are in the month of November, I'd just like to say, I'm thankful I happened upon WeWriWa, and all you amazing and supportive writers.  Please consider yourself truly appreciated!

49 comments:

  1. Ohh yes I do want to comfort her. There there, dear Ena, Ravyn will help you! Just be gentle, she's not insulated against your breath ;-)

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  2. Aw, poor dragon. The hiccup was a nice touch!

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  3. You've created a believable world of fantasy. Good job, Millie.

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    1. Thanks Charmaine. I think I've lived a lot of my life in my imaginary worlds ; )

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  4. Racing the clock--get there before that egg hatches and her baby is turned to the evil side. :-) Excellent choice, Millie! Good 8 :-) Good book!

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  5. I certainly do feel for the poor mother dragon - you've created her as very believable here! Excellent excerpt.

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  6. Oh, the poor dragon. I hope they are able to rescue the egg!

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    1. Poor baby dragon...in the hands of Zelera...

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  7. And now we have a time table! Expertly done. Great eight, as always! And poor dragon. :(

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    1. Gives you an idea that Ravyn's has many more hurdles to jump...

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  8. Oh no, poor mommy dragon. I'm nervous of her hiccups though, great touch.

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    1. She let her internal fires dampen...she's realized Ravyn's not her enemy : )

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  9. Mothers are mothers world around, it seems. I love the way you continue to humanize the dragons, Millie, great 8!

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    1. Ena is very much a person...she's just very large and scaly, with some powerful breath if she employs it : )

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  10. Poor dragon. Human emotions for a dragon - why not indeed!

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    1. She's intelligent for sure, and why should humans be the only ones with emotion?

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  11. I definitely want to giver her a hug! Well done.
    Tina Christopher (having issues with my ID;)

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    1. She'd hug you back. She's not as scary mean as she likes to pretend : )

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  12. Great job on how you've humanized the dragon when she's worried for her baby! Another great snippet!

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    1. I know how I'd feel if one of my babies went missing...Thanks Lauren.

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  13. I really felt for Ena. A mother's love for your baby... lovely snippet!

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    1. Thanks Karen. I don't know if there is a greater love...

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  14. I'm on the dragon's side, and I'm glad she now seems to be on Ravyn's

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  15. Poor dragon!

    Can she fly Rayven over?

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  16. Oh, I like how she hiccups a puff of smoke.

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  17. Nice, friendly read. I'll come back again for more! I.also like the hiccup.

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  18. You know, I've never much cared for dragons until this story. You have made me care, Millie. That's talent! :)

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    1. : ) That's so nice to hear Evelyn. I think they are often misunderstood.

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  19. Poor Ena. I love the hiccup and puff of smoke. Great visual there. And Ravyn is so interesting, I just adore her. Great eight.

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    1. Ravyn is a fun kid! I'm glad you like her.

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  20. I feel for the poor dragon and her concern for her baby - nice way you've gotten the reader's emotions involved.

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  21. I figured motherly panic was behind all that aggression, and now we get to see it. Nice. Sounds like momma dragon should try to hurry that journey along.

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  22. Oh no, Ena don't cry, you'll get the egg back!

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  23. Great emotion! Poor dragon. I hope her egg is okay! Love the visual of the plumes of smoke. Great 8.

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