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Saturday, January 25, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors! It was...magic

It's a beautiful day in writerhood, it's a beautiful day for a writer...would you read mine, if I read yours, will you be my writer friend? (Gosh, I miss that guy's wonderful cardigans...)  If you don't know whose song I've pirated, you're likely a youngin' or not from the US.  Any-who, welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors where writers from all over the globe share eight lines from their published work, or WIP that they are trying to work the kinks out of.  Folks travel the internet with the help of a linky tool you can find here, and read and comment on the little snippets.

I have been AWOL the last two weeks, and I left poor Medina up in a ship's crows nest with a scared young soldier from Rasport.  Medina is a harpy, not at all your typical harpy by the way.  The boy had asked Medina what she was doing, and she told him she was scoping out her enemies and found them running amok.  Here's what happens next...  

The boy’s eyes widened.  “We were attacked in the middle of the night.  No one knows how.  It was…magic,” he breathed.  “Aigerach is filled with magic and monsters.  None of us wanted to come here, but the king…”

“Ah yes, your king.  How did Zelera capture your King’s heart?”


And that's that...so whatcha think?  

To my friends who are trying to complete some writing goals this month, how's it going?  I have added a mere few hundred words, but the month isn't over yet!  I know my goal is to complete my story this month, and I don't really see that happening in the next six days, but miracles can happen...can't they?  I hope you've fared better than I.  Have a wonderful Sunday all!

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  1. Your words actually sound like your characters, I can pretty much hear the voices. Well done.

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    1. Thank you, I'm glad they sound believable.

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  2. Zelera is so strong, she probably used magic on the king.

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    1. Could be...that's a very real possibility, though magic is outlawed in that country...but she is sneaky too!

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  3. Every line you write is magic, Millie. Terrific excerpt!

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  4. Medina gets right to the heart of things, doesn't she! I can just picture that boy gawking at her, and her giving him a kind of knowing half-smile. Super excerpt as usual, Millie.

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    1. Thanks so much. She's pretty blunt : )

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  5. Medina rocks! Best Harpy ever. :-) Loving this story, Millie! :-)

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    1. Will do : ) I hope it's in the cards for today!

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  7. I think we must be getting to the part Medina is most interested in, yes? Excellent excerpt, love the harpy heroine.

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    1. Medina is trying to figure out her enemy, she's never met the folks from Rasport before now.

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  8. I had to go back and check who Zelara was, but I'm sure she used magic on the king somehow.

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    1. Zelera came to the king's shores an exile, and in pretty bad shape...he might have taken pity on her...especially if she fed him some lies about why she was exiled...

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  9. I will totally be your writer friend! :D I loved Mr. Rogers too. *sniff, sniff* Another wonderful excerpt from you. Love the magic and mystery involved. Can't wait for more! :)

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    1. I remember watching that show when I was little. I have no idea why that song popped in my head when I was setting up the blog page, but yup, that's where I went : ) Glad to have you as my writerly type friend!

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  10. I like this whole setup and the dialogue sounds very realistic:)

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    1. Thank you. It was a fun scene to write.

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  12. This snippet just brought more questions to the table. Who's Zelara? How did she steal the King's heart? why? was there an ulterior motive? Did things start going downhill ever since the King hooked up with Zelara? Must know more!

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  13. Yay! Glad you are full of unanswered questions : )

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  14. Okay, that was way too short. I want more!

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  15. Is it just me, or is Zelera one hard-working villainess? :D

    I agree with Christina---eight sentences is a chapter too short for this story.

    (I loved Our Favorite Neighbor's tennis shoes . .. )

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    1. Aw, thanks Sarah, I'm glad you all are enjoying, it really makes my heart glow when I read comments like yours : ) And, yeah, he had some sweet sneakers too : )

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  16. Ah a good question. Me thinks maybe magic, but maybe Zelera used her feminine wiles when she washed up on shore. I want to know how she stole his heart too. :)

    (I'm here, got an error when I tried to add to the WWW list last night.)
    The Murders of Polly Frisch

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    1. Feminine wiles...magic...aren't they one and the same? ; )

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  17. Ooh, all kinds of interesting questions raised with this snippet, too. I like how much more better informed she seems. Poor boy is flailing around.

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  18. This sets an interesting scene and raises some intriguing questions.

    Mr. Rogers lived in the same town as my paternal grandparents, Latrobe, PA. He's buried in the same cemetery as one of my great-uncles.

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  19. Magic and monsters! :) Intriguing story.

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  20. Intrigue and magic--an irresistible combination. I can't wait to read more.

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    1. Lovely! Glad you could swing through...

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  21. Love these little bits.

    And I miss Mr. Rogers.

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    1. Thanks LD, glad you are enjoying the tidbits : )

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  22. Ooo, nice! How did she capture the king's heart? Great teaser 8!

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  23. I'd like to know the answer to that one too.

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