A to Z Challenge

Saturday, March 29, 2014

WeWriWa - A Hint of Berry

Weekend Writing Warriors are out once again to share eight lines of work with you.  Yes, you.  Your next favorite read may be found if you travel the Warrior road...the variety of work available is astounding.  Just click this Link and you'll find more story samples than you can shake a stick at.  There's bound to be something a word weary traveler will enjoy.

Last week we left off with our tiny Clurichaun friend slurring out..."and that shleepy head's the Queen?" Today we begin with Ravyn's answer...

“Well, yes, I suppose…”
The little man belched far louder than his tiny body had any right to allow, shaking the leaves in the trees.  Lareina flinched at the noise, and the wine bag slid from her lap.  His Nibs eyes fell on the leather bag.  “Ah,” he sniffed, “a hint of berry, a little honeysuckle, and a taste of toffee that lingers on the palate…”
“You can smell all that?”                                                                                         

He winked his bloodshot eyes.  “Thazz what drew me and me sheepy friend here; I haven’ had any Royal wine in yearz...might I,” he paused licking his lips, “sample a wee nip?”

Ah, so much fun, this guy.  As always, I look forward to your comments and advice.  Have a very wonderful Sunday!  

44 comments:

  1. Damn drunken' faerie folk. LOL Great snippet, Millie!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Yup, they can give him drink...but shouldn't take any from him...

      Delete
  2. That's some sens of smell he's got here.

    ReplyDelete
  3. lol! I bet Ravyn and her mom are not too happy about *that* request! This story is so much fun :)

    ReplyDelete
  4. What a way to demonstrate such a smell! Yet I was almost laughing reading the belching part. Great, witty snippet Millie!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you. One is never too old for a little "childish" humor ;)

      Delete
  5. And it's fun to read this guy! I love the dialect you're giving him--it adds so much to the visual. Good character writing, Millie :-)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Why thank you : ) I had to do lots of research to get the speech right...not sure how many bottles I've emptied to get it to perfection : ) JK

      Delete
  6. Heck *I* want some of that wine, sounds really good! Terrific snippet!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. The grapes are grown in a magical land : )

      Delete
  7. Hehe...the belch! Oh my, the belch! This character has me totally invested. I love him. :D

    ReplyDelete
  8. Never refuse a magical little man his tipple---bad things will happen. Or so I assume. :D

    I adore His Nibs already.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. He might also make a wonderful ally...he seems to be pretty adept at things even when under the influence.

      Delete
  9. Drinking with this guy is bound to be a mistake! Love the character.

    ReplyDelete
  10. Millie, with all the belching and other body functions bound to happen, you and all your readers are having a fine time. Thanks for more fun and games coming from your imagination.

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. : ) Happy to supply the fun. You know, one of my rules in life is to have fun in all things, I'm glad to see it show up in my writing as well : )

      Delete
  11. That is just so funny! I love His Nibs, what an excellent quirky character you created in him.
    The Murders of Polly Frisch

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thanks, I keep saying this character or that is my favorite...but I think they all are. I have a really soft spot for His Nibs though.

      Delete
  12. He's a really strong character! I especially like this line, 'The little man belched far louder than his tiny body had any right to allow'. excellent!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. :D Could you hear it? It rumbled the ground around these parts...

      Delete
  13. You did a great job with this drunken dialogue -- just enough slurring to show what's going on but not so much that it was difficult to decipher. Sounds like you're having fun with this character.

    ReplyDelete
  14. Thank you Sandra, I'm glad to hear that. I want folks to know how sauced he is, but he is still able to get along quite well. He's a very functional drunkard : )

    ReplyDelete
  15. His Nibs, a very lovable character, appears to have already "sampled" more than his share. Fun 8!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. One can never have too many nips and samples, is his opinion : )

      Delete
  16. LOL! Millie, you never fail to entertain me with your posts! This is another fantastic excerpt! The dialogue is just spectacular!!! :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Evelyn, that means so much to me coming from you! I'm glad you enjoy : )

      Delete
  17. This is such a fun excerpt. This world and characters draw me!

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Thank you. I so wish I lived there full time. Hate not being able to stay there permanently : )

      Delete
  18. LOL! A man after my own heart! Love the voice and characterization in this piece.

    ReplyDelete
  19. The second sentence did it for me. A belch that shakes the leaves in the tree. Great imagery!

    ReplyDelete
  20. The belch heard around the world... o_O

    You're missing a possessive apostrophe in "His Nibs eyes," by the way.

    ReplyDelete
  21. He's not very couth, but he's fun.

    ReplyDelete
  22. Wonderful imagery! Enjoyed the snippet!

    ReplyDelete
  23. LOL He's drunk and he wants more. I'm loving this, Millie, it's so much fun!

    ReplyDelete
  24. Such vivid sensory description. I could almost smell that belch ;) Great snippet.

    ReplyDelete