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Saturday, October 25, 2014

This lovely lass has stolen my heart...


And a haunting happy Sunday to you.  Please join me in celebrating the Spooktacular group of writer's that make up WeWriWa!  You can find all kinds of tales that will give you shivers and tingles.  Eight sentences at a time.  It's like some kind of crazy magic!

I'm sharing a bit more of Ravyn and Lareina's time with Rowan and Murphy.  We last left off at a celebratory dinner with Ravyn feeling a bit guilty.  Let's see how things are progressing...


Ronan went to a cupboard and pulled out four crystal goblets and placed them on the table. He had a bottle of wine tucked under his arm, and he wiggled the cork back and forth till it came out with a little pop. He poured the light pink wine in each glass. Ravyn noted he filled the ladies glasses to the brim. He sat down and picked up his goblet raising it in a toast.

 “Blessing of the Light upon this lovely lass, who has stolen my heart.”

Ravyn pasted a happy grin on her face as she swallowed back a load of shame. Lareina’s eyes held hers for a moment, and answered her discomfort with some of her own.


So, I missed last week.  I had to work, so that I might have this past Friday off to put on a crazy haunted house at my daughter's school.  I've been doing this for several years now, each year a new theme.  It started in a mad scientist's lab, then we had a monster mash, on to a creepy carnival.  Last year was Pirates of the Carribean themed.  Last year...Sierra is a sixth grader.  I didn't know what I was going to do.  I thought I'd done it all...but wait, what's this?  what's this?  There's magic in the air...it's a Nightmare before Christmas walkthrough.  If you want to see some pics of what's been keeping me up all night this last month, click this link Master of Fright! Oh, and have a Happy Halloween you all!

33 comments:

  1. I love doing haunted houses, I used to help do an annual one for the community (20+ years), it was always so much fun and became a community tradition - unfortunately the current folks in charge don't want to do it anymore (party poopers, lol)

    I adore the attention to detail in your snippet (the cork popping...), it really makes me feel as if I am right there. Great snippet.

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    1. Thanks Chelle. I try to bring the world to life through all senses whenever possible without detracting from the story, and nothing says celebration like popping corks : )

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  2. I wonder what she wants from him and how long she will have to keep this up. If he is trying to get her drunk, that's not really cool.

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    1. She'll likely be breaking his heart, but she does need his help. He's not really a bad boy, just wants to make everyone cheerful and happy. Thinks he's gonna marry her, so if he got her drunk...

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  3. The line about swallowing back a load of shame is really great. I get the undercurrents perfectly. Well done.

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    1. Thank you. Ravyn really doesn't like using people, neither does her mother.

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  4. Uh oh. Now I'm getting nervous. Is he trying to get them drunk??? Good 8. I love the dialect!

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    1. Thanks, I try to make them Irish sounding without being over the top...delicate balance there. What boy doesn't like to see a girl all tipsy, so he can keep her steady on her feet. But no worries, there's food, and these girls do have magic at their disposal. All is well, for now.

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  5. Love the detail how he filled the ladies glasses to the brim - I suspect he has some "intention".
    Clicked on your Halloween set up- incredibly fantastic!
    Tweeted.

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    1. Thanks Victoria. Boys will be boys : ) He has never really seen a grown woman before, can't blame the boy, not really : ) And Halloween is such a great time of year for getting the creative juices flowing.

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  6. Lots of tension beneath that happy face. Intriguing snippet and great 8.

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    1. She's really not a manipulative person, and this goes against her moral compass. Poor girl.

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  7. Hmm. Fake smiles and hidden shame. I can feel the awkwardness in the air. Nice 8.

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    1. Thank you Lashell. Glad that comes through.

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  8. So everyone is hiding something! Love how you subtly reveal this. The exchanged look with her mother is great.

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    1. They are feeling a bit slimy right now about their deceptions...

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  9. So many layers to this scene. Love it:)

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  10. Love the tension underneath the seemingly happy scene and happy words. And very full wine glasses. Hmmm . . . Great snippet!

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    1. Thank you : ) Sometimes we have to do things we know are not exactly right, doesn't stop us from feeling like creeps, but a girls gotta do what a girls gotta do...

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  11. Wonderful imagery! Beneath the smiles, you can still feel the tension. Well done!

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  12. Enjoyable snippet, I especially enjoyed that last paragraph - powerful!

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  13. Great snippet, Millie! And I loved The Nightmare After Christmas haunted house! It's amazing! I left a comment there but I think it vanished. Wonderful!

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  14. I love the way you've shown her and her mother's shame.

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  15. It's terrible to know you're doing the wrong thing, but feel like you can't change your actions. I bet she feels worse later!

    You have --till-- where you meant the contraction of until --'til-- though.

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  16. An uncomfortable little scene inagoodway. I'm curious why he filled their glasses so full (although I have some good guesses LOL). Can't wait for more!

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  17. Trying to get the girls tipsy? Not the best way to continue a courtship, even if it's one-sided!

    I do feel for the poor men---I hope there are other seals in the sea? ;)

    Awesome as always, Millie! :D

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  18. I like the part about swallowing back the shame. If he's trying to woo her, getting her drunk probably isn't a good idea.

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  19. The haunted house sounds cool!

    So...filled their glasses to the brim, that sounds like the men suspect there may be more to the ladies afterall. Getting them drunk, or trying to in order to keep them around??? Very interesting in deed and Rayvn feeling guilty of their deceit.

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  20. Your haunted house looks AWESOME! So creative and fun! I'm hiring you next year. ;) Love the little details throughout this excerpt, like filling their glasses to the brim. Looking forward to next week!

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  21. Oh wow, I love it, especially this line, "Ravyn pasted a happy grin on her face as she swallowed back a load of shame." Such beautifully descriptive word choices you use! :) Great work.

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