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Saturday, January 24, 2015

WeWriWa - Which one led to Ravyn

Welcome to another Sunday post.  Which means it's time for Weekend Writing Warriors!  A blog hop every week, where writer's from all walks of genre's post eight lines from their published work...or if you're lucky sneak peeks into their WIP's.  Click the above link to find out more about how to join, or to find other author's works to sample!
Last week, I ended my snippet run from my WIP.  I decided you all need some of where this story started.  Ravyn and Blade's beginnings.  Then you might understand why that Seamus just doesn't have what it takes to win this girl's heart.  So...here's where Blade and Ravyn are reintroduced to each other after years of separation.  Ravyn had been kidnapped by Zelera's thugs and she managed to escape.  Blade is looking to make a rescue : )



Looking down from the summit of the mountain, Blade noticed three openings below him in the back of the rock face. Which one led to Ravyn? He spotted a ledge some fifty feet down that gave him access to a cave, and a short traverse would lead him to a second cave if the first proved to be a dead end.

Noting the large handholds on the rock, he decided to climb down rather than use his rope to rappel. He grabbed onto the lip with his hands as he lowered his legs over the edge. His toe found purchase on a modest nub - a vertical crack ran down the rock. He jammed his fist into it, flexing his hand against the rough granite to create a very safe hold.

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  1. Your description sounded so real I could practically feel wind rush by as he climbed down the rocks. Well done!

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    1. Glad it didn't come across too technical.

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  2. Awww always love your snippets thank you so much for sharing. :)

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    1. Always a pleasure to see your smiling face!

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  3. Hmm, written as only a true climber could write it! :-)

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  4. Makes me wish I were going rock-climbing! I could really picture the scene.

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    1. Rock climbing is so much fun! Glad you could picture it!

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  5. He's way braver than me. Climbing down the side of a rock face. Great description.

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    1. Down climbing is far more dangerous than climbing up, that's true. Blade is a brave guy!

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  6. Makes me glad I'm not rock climbing! Great details and Blade does sound like a hard act to follow. Poor Seamus.

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    1. There may be magic for Seamus at some point...just might not be with Ravyn.

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  7. Her heart belongs to someone else? 😮 Seamus can't compare to Blade, I dont think he can climb like that!

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    1. No, but he sure can swim like the dickens : )

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  8. You've captured this reader. Scary business, rock climbing and you pulled me right into mountain searching for a hand hold. Super snippet.

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    1. Thanks Charmaine. I've always found rock climbing to be exhilarating vs. scary : )

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  9. the details in his climbing are perfect. he's determined as clear by his actions.

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    1. Thanks Michelle, glad to hear it rings true.

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  10. I liked your flow of description. Could visualize the rock face to the lip of the edge. Nicely done! :)

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    1. Thanks. I've spent a lot of time climbing, it's a favorite pastime of mine. I'm glad the descriptions help take people up on the face...

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  11. Ooooh! I'm fond of Seamus but Blade sounds very resourceful indeed. ;)

    This is an excellent introduction, Millie!

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    1. Blade is pretty darn amazing : ) The more you get to know him, the more you'll love him...I think. Seamus turned into a much bigger character than I initially thought he'd be. He's just so stinking charming : )

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  12. Very realistic description of his rock climbing challenge (not that I climb, but wow, you really had me feeling like I was watching him in real time). Great snippet!

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    1. Why thank you so much. Glad to hear it : )

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  13. Yes, the details of his rock climbing ground this snippet, even for those of us with no climbing experience. Anyone who would do this sort of thing is bound to be kick ass when it comes to winning a girl's heart. Great 8

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    1. Rock climbing requires a certain confidence and comfort with one's abilities to be sure. Blade is that guy, hardworking and full of confidence. But still so wonderfully humble : )

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  14. Crystal clear details grant this piece just the right amount of realistic tension. Nice work, Millie!

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    1. Why thank you Steven. I appreciate all the kind kudos : )

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  15. That doesn't sound "very safe" to me, but he seems confident. Good luck to him!

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    1. When you are a confident climber things that scare the pants off other folks is like a walk in the park.

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  16. I like the balance of his confidence in his skills vs his insecurity in his lack on information. Good details, too!

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    1. He's hoping he knows where she will be...glad you enjoyed it.

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  17. Wow. He's risking his very life to save her. No wonder Seamus can't get anywhere.

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    1. Blade and Ravyn have known each other their whole lives. They have a very special relationship.

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  18. It sounded very authentic to me. He's seems confident in himself..

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  19. How does he know the one cave will lead to another? Has he come this way before?

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    1. He doesn't know if the caves connect. If one is a dead end...he will traverse across the rock face to get to the other cave. Traversing is a climbing term for going sideways along a cliff instead of up or down.

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  20. Very vivid and realistic snippet. Sounds like he's going to get himself a girl!

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  21. I'm wondering why he is not using the rope. Does he need it for something else? Because that would be faster.

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  22. I have issues with high places and reading your snippet I tensed up, picturing the rock, the crevice, the ground way far away. Great snippet.

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