A to Z Challenge

Saturday, June 29, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors

My first WeWriWa post. How thrilling. Without much further ado, I will share eight sentences of my WIP with you (Fantasy genre). The protagonist, Ravyn and her mother Lareina have come to the rescue...but is it too late?

"Connor, can you hear me," Ravyn reached over and tapped him on the chest.
His eyes were open wide, but he didn't respond.
Lareina sank to the floor, head in her hands.
Deadly silence infused the room. Ravyn looked to Josh, "Get my father, please," she whispered.
Magda lay on her side. Her soft gray hair fell about her face wise with wrinkles. Her lips turned up in a small smile. Ravyn leaned over to trace a gentle kiss across Magada's forehead, "Blessings of the Light upon you," she murmured.


Okay, so there they are. Love to hear what you think. If you'd like to join in the snippets o' fun, just click the button below.

30 comments:

  1. Seems we've come in at a bittersweet moment, all in all. I liked the way Ravyn reacted. Great snippet!

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  2. My attention was drawn to Magada... she seems to be holding a secret in that smile... lovely snippet!

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  3. No idea what's going on, but definitely intrigued. I agree with Susan that Magda's smile seems to hold some secret. (And welcome to WeWriWa.)

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    1. I chose something completely random to post, with little information to clue you in...glad it intrigued you though : ) I'm excited to be doing WeWriWa! As time goes on, hopefully you'll get a better idea of the story : )

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  4. Love the tension here! I'm definitely wanting to know what happens next!

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  5. This was beautifully written, conveying emotion. And it's sad, yet seems to hold a mystery. Well done!

    And welcome to wewriwa. We're glad to have you!! :-)

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    1. Thanks Teresa, I'm excited to be here.

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  6. 'wise with wrinkles' Love it! Great 8 :D

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    1. That line may have come from personal experience ;)

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  7. I like Magda with the soft grey hair and her gentle smile. So many characters to get to know. What is her connection with Connor, with our protagonist and her mother. Gereat start. I also feel honored that you commented on my eight your first time with wewriwa. I hope that you continue.

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  8. Great start. And I must learn the discipline of a preview.

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  9. Blessings of the Light upon you," she murmured. this line has me intrigued. And welcome!

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  10. Well, you certainly jumped into WWW with a bang! Very interesting things going on in this scene. Looking forward to learning more about these characters:)

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    1. Thank you. I'm excited to get to share them with you : )

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  11. Welcome to WeWriWa. Lovely snippet. Great voice. I like the Mona Lisa-type smile on Magda's face, and the "Blessings of the Light," quote. Can't wait for more!

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    1. Thank you. It is a bittersweet smile.

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  12. Certainly has me wondering what will happen next!!! Can't wait for more!! Welcome :-)

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  13. Loads going on! Enjoyed your snippet!

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  14. So much emotion from so many people, you managed to capture it all perfectly.

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  15. Those are very emotive sentences. The last one brought a tear to my eye.

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    1. I'm sorry I don't have any tissues for you...but I'm glad you enjoyed!

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