A to Z Challenge

Saturday, June 28, 2014

WeWriWa - What is so funny?

On your mark, get set...GO!  And they're off, each Weekend Writing Warrior setting out eight sentences...tantalizing you with their hints and innuendo.  All you have to do is follow the link HERE and you're at the starting line.  Click link after link, read writing styles from various genres, stroke the ego's of the talented authorial athletes by commenting on what you've read, and don't stop till you get to the end.  You'll be rewarded with great free entertainment!  So get going!

This week is a continuation of where we left off last...Zelera and Kes are together in hiding.  The young boy captive has proven to be more of a handful than Zelera was prepared for and her nerves are frayed.  She's hoping to ease some of her tension by getting him to take a nap...


Zelera sat on a small stool next to his bed, her long bony legs bent up in sharp angles and her spindly arms reached over to pluck a book off the shelf.  Kes’ laugh echoed around the room.
“What is so funny?”
“You are a big old spider!”
“What?!”
“You should see yourself meanie auntie.  Your legs are all long and scary, like a spider.”  Then his eyes widened in fright, “Oh no!”

47 comments:

  1. Has he just heared what he said, or has he seen something? (Mine won't be live for another 9 hours.)

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  2. The imagery is fantastic, Millie! Your description of her and her legs--and then the spider remark...perfect! Nicely done.Now, what has Kes seen???? :-)

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    1. Hmm...did he see something or just realize something? Next week : )

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  3. I love it! Great details and wonderful dialogue (not that I've come to expect anything less. ;D)

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  4. This post made me laugh out loud. Fantastic work!

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    1. Oh lovely : ). Your comment made me smile!

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  5. Wonderful imagery, as always. Your characters are so unique, Millie. I laughed too but when Kes got scared, I worried about what might happen next - something worse than being kidnapped by Zelera?? Just a great excerpt. :D

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    1. Ha ha ha, you all have to wait to see : )

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  6. Argh! What has he seen? Or maybe he just thought of something? Fun snippet.

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  7. LOL! His outburst is exactly what I was thinking from your description!

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  8. Excellent excerpt, I definitely had the image of how she looked in my mind and then Kes apparently gets the same mental picture - very effective!

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    1. : ) Oh you all are stroking my ego today : )

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  9. Out of the mouths of mouthy kids? Can't wait to find out! :D

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    1. Hee hee hee. He's such the cuteness : )

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  10. Great snippet! Wonderful way of describing her and showing Kes's personality at the same time. LIke everyone else, I can't wait to find out what alarmed him.

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    1. Thank you so kindly! She's trying so hard to be "sweet" but it just never quite works for her.

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  11. Wonderful visual! Gotta love Kes' honesty. lol

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  12. Great visual! And now I'm worried about Kes. Did he hit the nail on the head with his innocent shout out and will she punish/scare him?

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    1. : ) Kes is pretty good at taking care of himself...

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  13. LOL! What a place to end it! I think he's either seeing an actual spider, or she's using one of those spindly spider arms of hers to give him a smack. lol

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    1. Oh those snippets when they leave us dangling...

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  14. Fab way to show both characters and entertain the reader. Great snippet. :)

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  15. You've made the kid very real in the way he tells her just what he thinks even though it's not flattering. Great snippet.

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    1. Kids do just "blat" it out...don't they?

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  16. Ah. He seems like a silly little boy. :)

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  17. Open mouth... insert foot. Something tells me she's not going to think this is funny, at all.

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  18. Such great details make for a wonderful description.

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    1. It's all in the details...or so they say : )

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  19. Maybe she'll use his fear of spiders to her advantage... Threaten to inject him with some poison or something. Glue his mouth shut with spider silk...

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  20. Out of the mouths of babes comes truth. And it's not always amusing to adults. Terrific eight, Millie.

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  21. Perhaps he saw her REAL nature in her angry response to his comment? I feel sorry for that child.

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    1. Yeah, he wouldn't be with her if he could help it...

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  22. I really like the imagery of that first line. It pulled me right in:)

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  23. Oh my god! Did she just turned into a spider?

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  24. I can just picture her. ☺ So of course, we're wondering what happened at the end. Great cliffhanger, Millie!

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