A to Z Challenge

Sunday, August 4, 2013

We WriWa #5

Good day to you.  If you've found yourself here, you are probably looking for an eight sentence snippet.  You've probably followed a link from WeWriWa.  If you didn't, then all the more lucky for you.  Every sunday, folks across the world gather to share little enticing bits of either published work, WIP's, or poetry.  Please follow the link to learn more and to find other authors work! 

Sharing more dragons today.  If you remember last week, a dragon snatched Ronan up in his talons and whisked him up in the air.  Ravyn's had the wind knocked out of her, so is having difficulty communicating to the dragons that she is not in need of a rescue.  If you'd like to refresh your memory, click here!
 
 
Lareina stepped out of the door, throwing her hands wide and casting an arc of Light that danced across the skies.  Ribbons of color streamed from her fingers and danced across the magnificent ruby creatures, wrapping them in the power of the Light.  “Stop,” she commanded.

Ena stilled her angry thrashing, and gazed across the trampled grasses at Lareina.  She curled up on the ground and looked up to her son, Ardan, who hovered over the woods.  Ronan still dangled from his grasp, arms wind milling and fear a-flutter in his eyes.

“Drop the boy and come on down,” Ena growled.

“No,” gasped Ravyn, “Don’t drop him.”
 
I hope you enjoyed.  All comments delightfully anticipated and welcomed!!!

38 comments:

  1. "wind milling" Nice visual!

    Ha! In the nick of time. I agree. Don't drop him!

    Nice 8, Millie! :-)

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    1. Ronan's feeling pretty helpless right about now. Thanks for stopping in Teresa!

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  2. Lovely job!! I especially like the part about the ribbons of color!! I'm really enjoying theses snippets!

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    1. Thank you Lauren. The magic in Aigerach (stories setting) works with threads of Light or Darkness. I always felt like I'd love to see magic at work and wondered what it might look like : )

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  3. awesome!!! I'm sitting there right with her saying NOOOOOO don't drop him! Nice job and beautiful description of the magic. Well done.

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  4. Poor Ronan, please don't drop him LOL. Another excellent excerpt!

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    1. I'm sure the ladies will manage to keep poor Ronan safe : )

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  5. Once again, a communications problem butts in.

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    1. It's sort of just an extension of the whole situation. Dragons have an odd sense of humor : )

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  6. Loved the scene. Felt like I was right there. I sure hope Ronan won't be dropped! lol

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  7. "Drop" is probably a poor choice of words. 'Carefully set down' might be better for his peace of mind!

    Love the phrase about "fear a-flutter in his eyes."

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    1. Thanks Caitlin. Ronan sure is hoping for a careful set down...we'll see next week if that happens : )

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  8. Nice snippet. Very vivid descriptions and good action.

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  9. No, don't drop him! :D

    I'm loving this scene so much!

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    1. Glad to hear it. It was fun to write.

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  10. Love the tone and the description of magic. Don't drop him! Great snippet!

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    1. Thanks Karen, magic is so much fun to write.

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  11. Tense and exciting, great imagery!

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  12. Ahh. Love this! Very magical, and I adore that she has control over them! Terrific snippet!

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    1. Thanks Joanne, glad you stopped by : )

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  13. Magic and dragons and threads of light--oh my! Exciting and so well written as if it's happening right now. Super eight! Millie, can you contact me re: my senior short stories and some promo? cgordon3@verizon.net

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    1. Thanks Charmaine. I'll send you a note.

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  14. I love the "ribbons of color" that streamed from her fingers. Great 8!

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    1. Thanks Ann, the magic in Aigerach is very visual : )

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  15. Don't drop him! Lovely description. Well done.

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    1. Thanks Elaine. We'll see if he can get to the ground safely next week!

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  16. No! Don't drop him! You paint a great picture with your words, Millie.

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    1. Thank you. I hope my writing brings up mental images.

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  17. You've described it so well. It's so beautifully detailed, and yet moves the story along. Great moment here. I'm hoping Lareina can save him!

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  18. Love the imagery. This is something I should attempt when the old WIP is ready ;)

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  19. It would be funny if he drops him... I like that dragon. :)

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  20. He's a good guy, he doesn't need to get a bump on the noggin'.

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