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Last week we left off with our tiny Clurichaun friend slurring out..."and that shleepy head's the Queen?" Today we begin with Ravyn's answer...
“Well,
yes, I suppose…”
The
little man belched far louder than his tiny body had any right to allow,
shaking the leaves in the trees. Lareina
flinched at the noise, and the wine bag slid from her lap. His Nibs eyes fell on the leather bag. “Ah,” he sniffed, “a hint of berry, a little
honeysuckle, and a taste of toffee that lingers on the palate…”
“You
can smell all that?”
He
winked his bloodshot eyes. “Thazz what
drew me and me sheepy friend here; I haven’ had any Royal wine in yearz...might
I,” he paused licking his lips, “sample a wee nip?”
Ah, so much fun, this guy. As always, I look forward to your comments and advice. Have a very wonderful Sunday!
Damn drunken' faerie folk. LOL Great snippet, Millie!
ReplyDeleteYup, they can give him drink...but shouldn't take any from him...
DeleteThat's some sens of smell he's got here.
ReplyDeleteHe just knows his liquor ; )
Deletelol! I bet Ravyn and her mom are not too happy about *that* request! This story is so much fun :)
ReplyDeleteHe's a bit of a mooch.
DeleteWhat a way to demonstrate such a smell! Yet I was almost laughing reading the belching part. Great, witty snippet Millie!
ReplyDeleteThank you. One is never too old for a little "childish" humor ;)
DeleteAnd it's fun to read this guy! I love the dialect you're giving him--it adds so much to the visual. Good character writing, Millie :-)
ReplyDeleteWhy thank you : ) I had to do lots of research to get the speech right...not sure how many bottles I've emptied to get it to perfection : ) JK
DeleteHeck *I* want some of that wine, sounds really good! Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteThe grapes are grown in a magical land : )
DeleteHa! Love it!
ReplyDeleteThank'ee : )
DeleteHehe...the belch! Oh my, the belch! This character has me totally invested. I love him. :D
ReplyDeleteThank you : )
DeleteNever refuse a magical little man his tipple---bad things will happen. Or so I assume. :D
ReplyDeleteI adore His Nibs already.
He might also make a wonderful ally...he seems to be pretty adept at things even when under the influence.
DeleteDrinking with this guy is bound to be a mistake! Love the character.
ReplyDeleteMaybe...
DeleteMillie, with all the belching and other body functions bound to happen, you and all your readers are having a fine time. Thanks for more fun and games coming from your imagination.
ReplyDelete: ) Happy to supply the fun. You know, one of my rules in life is to have fun in all things, I'm glad to see it show up in my writing as well : )
DeleteThat is just so funny! I love His Nibs, what an excellent quirky character you created in him.
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Thanks, I keep saying this character or that is my favorite...but I think they all are. I have a really soft spot for His Nibs though.
DeleteHe's a really strong character! I especially like this line, 'The little man belched far louder than his tiny body had any right to allow'. excellent!
ReplyDelete:D Could you hear it? It rumbled the ground around these parts...
DeleteYou did a great job with this drunken dialogue -- just enough slurring to show what's going on but not so much that it was difficult to decipher. Sounds like you're having fun with this character.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sandra, I'm glad to hear that. I want folks to know how sauced he is, but he is still able to get along quite well. He's a very functional drunkard : )
ReplyDeleteHis Nibs, a very lovable character, appears to have already "sampled" more than his share. Fun 8!
ReplyDeleteOne can never have too many nips and samples, is his opinion : )
DeleteClever dialogue :-) Nice job!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sandra : )
DeleteLOL! Millie, you never fail to entertain me with your posts! This is another fantastic excerpt! The dialogue is just spectacular!!! :)
ReplyDeleteEvelyn, that means so much to me coming from you! I'm glad you enjoy : )
DeleteThis is such a fun excerpt. This world and characters draw me!
ReplyDeleteThank you. I so wish I lived there full time. Hate not being able to stay there permanently : )
DeleteLOL! A man after my own heart! Love the voice and characterization in this piece.
ReplyDeleteThe second sentence did it for me. A belch that shakes the leaves in the tree. Great imagery!
ReplyDeleteThe belch heard around the world... o_O
ReplyDeleteYou're missing a possessive apostrophe in "His Nibs eyes," by the way.
He's not very couth, but he's fun.
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery! Enjoyed the snippet!
ReplyDeleteLOL He's drunk and he wants more. I'm loving this, Millie, it's so much fun!
ReplyDeleteSuch vivid sensory description. I could almost smell that belch ;) Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteA fun guy indeed.
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