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This week is a continuation of where we left off last...Zelera and Kes are together in hiding. The young boy captive has proven to be more of a handful than Zelera was prepared for and her nerves are frayed. She's hoping to ease some of her tension by getting him to take a nap...
Zelera
sat on a small stool next to his bed, her long bony legs bent up in sharp
angles and her spindly arms reached over to pluck a book off the shelf. Kes’ laugh echoed around the room.
“What
is so funny?”
“You
are a big old spider!”
“What?!”
“You should see
yourself meanie auntie. Your legs are
all long and scary, like a spider.” Then
his eyes widened in fright, “Oh no!”
Has he just heared what he said, or has he seen something? (Mine won't be live for another 9 hours.)
ReplyDeleteWe'll see next week : )
DeleteThe imagery is fantastic, Millie! Your description of her and her legs--and then the spider remark...perfect! Nicely done.Now, what has Kes seen???? :-)
ReplyDeleteHmm...did he see something or just realize something? Next week : )
DeleteI love it! Great details and wonderful dialogue (not that I've come to expect anything less. ;D)
ReplyDeleteThank you : ).
DeleteThis post made me laugh out loud. Fantastic work!
ReplyDeleteOh lovely : ). Your comment made me smile!
DeleteWonderful imagery, as always. Your characters are so unique, Millie. I laughed too but when Kes got scared, I worried about what might happen next - something worse than being kidnapped by Zelera?? Just a great excerpt. :D
ReplyDeleteHa ha ha, you all have to wait to see : )
DeleteArgh! What has he seen? Or maybe he just thought of something? Fun snippet.
ReplyDelete: ) Maybe...
DeleteLOL! His outburst is exactly what I was thinking from your description!
ReplyDelete*rubs hands in glee* Excellent!
DeleteExcellent excerpt, I definitely had the image of how she looked in my mind and then Kes apparently gets the same mental picture - very effective!
ReplyDelete: ) Oh you all are stroking my ego today : )
DeleteOut of the mouths of mouthy kids? Can't wait to find out! :D
ReplyDeleteHee hee hee. He's such the cuteness : )
DeleteGreat snippet! Wonderful way of describing her and showing Kes's personality at the same time. LIke everyone else, I can't wait to find out what alarmed him.
ReplyDeleteThank you so kindly! She's trying so hard to be "sweet" but it just never quite works for her.
DeleteWonderful visual! Gotta love Kes' honesty. lol
ReplyDeleteHe tells it like he sees it : )
DeleteGreat visual! And now I'm worried about Kes. Did he hit the nail on the head with his innocent shout out and will she punish/scare him?
ReplyDelete: ) Kes is pretty good at taking care of himself...
DeleteLOL! What a place to end it! I think he's either seeing an actual spider, or she's using one of those spindly spider arms of hers to give him a smack. lol
ReplyDeleteOh those snippets when they leave us dangling...
DeleteFab way to show both characters and entertain the reader. Great snippet. :)
ReplyDeleteWhy thank you : )
DeleteYou've made the kid very real in the way he tells her just what he thinks even though it's not flattering. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteKids do just "blat" it out...don't they?
DeleteAh. He seems like a silly little boy. :)
ReplyDeleteHe's a cutie.
DeleteOpen mouth... insert foot. Something tells me she's not going to think this is funny, at all.
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DeleteSuch great details make for a wonderful description.
ReplyDeleteIt's all in the details...or so they say : )
DeleteMaybe she'll use his fear of spiders to her advantage... Threaten to inject him with some poison or something. Glue his mouth shut with spider silk...
ReplyDeleteOoh, I like the way you think...
DeleteOut of the mouths of babes comes truth. And it's not always amusing to adults. Terrific eight, Millie.
ReplyDeleteHee hee hee
DeletePerhaps he saw her REAL nature in her angry response to his comment? I feel sorry for that child.
ReplyDeleteYeah, he wouldn't be with her if he could help it...
DeleteI really like the imagery of that first line. It pulled me right in:)
ReplyDeleteThanks : )
DeleteOh my god! Did she just turned into a spider?
ReplyDeleteShe is spidery in her ways...
DeleteI can just picture her. ☺ So of course, we're wondering what happened at the end. Great cliffhanger, Millie!
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