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I've skipped ahead a bit this week...they are still at their celebratory meal...or so the men think. Let's see what Ravyn has to say...
Ravyn took a sip, and when she looked up, she found Seamus leaning forward on his stool, eyes dancing across her face, waiting. Her dry mouth ached as she contemplated the lies that lay silent behind her lips. She took a deep breath. “Okay, I thought I could do this, but I can’t...”
“Ravyn my love, what can you nae do?”
Ravyn stood, and placed her glass down on the table. She pulled the pearl Seamus had given her out of her pocket and placed it in his hand. “Seamus, you are a wonderful man who deserves a wonderful lady, but it’s not me.”
I am not doing Nano this year. I had too much on my plate last month, and I don't have the stamina to push myself as hard as necessary this month. But, I would be happy to root for all of you who are working your little tails off trying to make wonderful literary things happen. Go team WeWriWaNaNoers : ) You can do it!!!!
Nicely done. She lets him go in a ladylike sweet way. Now I wonder how he'll take this.Watch the fur fly?
ReplyDeleteShe doesn't want to hurt him, but she does need his help : )
Delete"Her dry mouth ached as she contemplated the lies that lay silent behind her lips." Wow, wow, wow! The whole snippet is a wonderful piece of writing, Millie. There's images and movement in the words. :-) Fantastic!
ReplyDeleteThank you my wonderful cheerleader. You just swelled my hat size : )
DeleteI totally agree with Teresa, Millie! This is excellent storytelling.
ReplyDeleteAnd I feel so bad for everyone in this scene . . .
You sweethearts, thank you for the kudos. I'm glad I can get you emotionally vested.
DeleteI like Rayvn's honesty, but if I were Seamus, I'd be telling her she can. I'm not doing Nano either - I have enough to write as it is. Nice excerpt.
ReplyDeleteHe has never seen a woman before, but he's likely to come across more in the near future.
DeleteBeautiful writing, can't wait to read his reaction to her words.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gemma.
DeleteI must know what he'll say to her admission. Wonderful snippet!
ReplyDeleteYay. Compulsion to read more, excellent!
DeleteI'm with Frank! He's clearly smitten with her and I bet that whatever she tells him, he won't let her go easily. And I'm rooting for the two of them myself ;-)
ReplyDeleteHe is smitten, but she is the only woman he's ever seen...
DeleteAwww... I feel bad for both of them. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI hope to eventually have you all feeling better...
DeleteAnd what a cliffhanger as we wait to see what Seamus will say now! I'm glad she couldn't keep the lie going on, excellent description of her physical symptoms. Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteThanks Veronica. Will Seamus handle this information well? We'll see soon : )
DeleteVery excellent snippet. You leave us anxious to hear his reply.
ReplyDelete:). I'll be off at Disneyland next week, so you'll have to hang for a couple weeks, but I'll return to this when I return : )
DeleteI would more aptly refer to myself as a Non-NaNo-Er. I tend to write more in November but I still do it at a pace that doesn't put me under any amount of pressure. Now, as for you, fabulous work this week! I LOVED this line: Her dry mouth ached as she contemplated the lies that lay silent behind her lips. - Wickedly worded, my friend!
ReplyDeleteThank you so kindly. Sometimes when I reread something I wrote, I think...hmm, not bad. I wrote that? Ha.
DeleteGlad she told the truth, but you sure left us with a cliffhanger,
ReplyDeleteAh, evil me. We writer's do seem to have an evil streak at times.
DeleteHmm. Now I wonder why she let him go when it seems she may care for him.
ReplyDeleteShe's a caring person? She is engaged to a pretty darn awesome guy, who didn't get to go on this little quest...I haven't shown Blade much, but you all would like him : )
DeleteIt's so hard to let go of someone you love, even when you feel you're making the right choice.
ReplyDeleteYup, well, she doesn't really love him, she cares about his feelings, but she's in love with someone else. Snippets are funny, because we are sharing such small portions of the overall story, people can come away thinking things are one way, when they are another...because they haven't gotten all the backstory : ) I love seeing what everyone's thinking.
DeleteWhat a gentle but heavily symbolic gesture along with compassionate words. Great 8!
ReplyDeleteWow...I'm glad she spoke up. The pearl? Like an engagement offering of some kind? And what will the others say? Very interesting 8, can't wait for the next set.
ReplyDeleteLove the contemplated lies line too. :) Imagine eing told at a public dinner. Yikes. How he handles it will make for great conflict.
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Aw, poor Seamus.
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