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Okay, so this week I'm continuing on with Ravyn and Ena. If you remember, we left Ena pondering the girl before her, and the explanations she's been given. I've been creative with punctuation, which is probably pretty obvious.
“How long will
this journey take you?”
Ravyn noticed the
smoke from the dragon’s nostrils had decreased to a slim plume. “...I have to get to Aigerach first, and well, you
have rather destroyed my transportation.
It’s going to take me a week at least to put together a seaworthy raft
to get me across that channel. A half
day of sailing, I’d guess, then it’ll
probably take a month or so to cross over the land to get to Veris. How long till your egg hatches?”
“Over a month, as
long as it’s kept warm--this aunt of
yours stole it for blood, you think? Who
knows if my baby still lives,” Ena began
to sob, hiccupping a puff of smoke.
Oh, my. Don't you just want to give that momma dragon some loving? Poor girl...
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Ohh yes I do want to comfort her. There there, dear Ena, Ravyn will help you! Just be gentle, she's not insulated against your breath ;-)
ReplyDeleteEna is smiling Marcia...she likes you!
DeleteAw, poor dragon. The hiccup was a nice touch!
ReplyDeleteWhy thank you Gemma.
DeleteYou've created a believable world of fantasy. Good job, Millie.
ReplyDeleteThanks Charmaine. I think I've lived a lot of my life in my imaginary worlds ; )
DeleteRacing the clock--get there before that egg hatches and her baby is turned to the evil side. :-) Excellent choice, Millie! Good 8 :-) Good book!
ReplyDeleteGlad you are enjoying Teresa : )
DeleteI certainly do feel for the poor mother dragon - you've created her as very believable here! Excellent excerpt.
ReplyDeleteThank you Veronica.
DeleteOh, the poor dragon. I hope they are able to rescue the egg!
ReplyDeletePoor baby dragon...in the hands of Zelera...
DeleteAnd now we have a time table! Expertly done. Great eight, as always! And poor dragon. :(
ReplyDeleteGives you an idea that Ravyn's has many more hurdles to jump...
DeleteOh no, poor mommy dragon. I'm nervous of her hiccups though, great touch.
ReplyDeleteShe let her internal fires dampen...she's realized Ravyn's not her enemy : )
DeleteMothers are mothers world around, it seems. I love the way you continue to humanize the dragons, Millie, great 8!
ReplyDeleteEna is very much a person...she's just very large and scaly, with some powerful breath if she employs it : )
DeletePoor dragon. Human emotions for a dragon - why not indeed!
ReplyDeleteShe's intelligent for sure, and why should humans be the only ones with emotion?
DeleteI definitely want to giver her a hug! Well done.
ReplyDeleteTina Christopher (having issues with my ID;)
She'd hug you back. She's not as scary mean as she likes to pretend : )
DeleteGreat job on how you've humanized the dragon when she's worried for her baby! Another great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI know how I'd feel if one of my babies went missing...Thanks Lauren.
DeleteI really felt for Ena. A mother's love for your baby... lovely snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks Karen. I don't know if there is a greater love...
DeleteI'm on the dragon's side, and I'm glad she now seems to be on Ravyn's
ReplyDeleteThey do become pretty good friends : )
DeletePoor dragon!
ReplyDeleteCan she fly Rayven over?
Aha, thinking ahead! She might : )
DeleteOh no, poor dragon! :-( Great eight!
ReplyDeleteEna agrees, poor dragon : )
DeleteOh, I like how she hiccups a puff of smoke.
ReplyDeleteIt did seem to fit : )
DeleteNice, friendly read. I'll come back again for more! I.also like the hiccup.
ReplyDeleteThank you Roberta : )
DeleteYou know, I've never much cared for dragons until this story. You have made me care, Millie. That's talent! :)
ReplyDelete: ) That's so nice to hear Evelyn. I think they are often misunderstood.
DeletePoor Ena. I love the hiccup and puff of smoke. Great visual there. And Ravyn is so interesting, I just adore her. Great eight.
ReplyDeleteRavyn is a fun kid! I'm glad you like her.
DeleteI feel for the poor dragon and her concern for her baby - nice way you've gotten the reader's emotions involved.
ReplyDeleteThanks Chelle.
DeleteI figured motherly panic was behind all that aggression, and now we get to see it. Nice. Sounds like momma dragon should try to hurry that journey along.
ReplyDelete; ) You may have a good idea there!
DeleteOh no, Ena don't cry, you'll get the egg back!
ReplyDeleteOne would hope!
DeleteGreat emotion! Poor dragon. I hope her egg is okay! Love the visual of the plumes of smoke. Great 8.
ReplyDeleteThank you Karen.
DeletePoor Ena!
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