This week I'm skipping ahead only a few lines, but am bringing you more of the interaction between our dear friend His Nibs and the Mara...
His Nibs
leaped onto his sheep’s back. He waved a
red velvet sack around his head that jingled and jangled. “C’mon you nassty shpecter! I’ve got loadsh of coinzz! I’ve got more giftz than yer nassty black
butt ken gather!” He kicked the sheep’s
flank, and it lurched forward bleating loudly.
His Nibs flipped a gold coin over his shoulder.
The Mara followed the
coins arc through the air, and eyed it glimmering on the ground.
Sounds like the Mara likes gold. (Mine won't be live until tomorrow morning.)
ReplyDeleteIn folk tales, the way to stop a Mara from plaguing you with nightmares, is to offer it a gift. This Mara felt Ravyn's gift a bit puny, it isn't accepting her gift and following the rules...but a sackful of coins...
DeleteShort and punchy. Nice active writing.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I have been trying to keep my verbiage down when possible : )
DeleteI love His Nibs way of doing things and his colorful language, LOL Great snippet! Looks like the end of The Mara is nearing...
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DeleteI think His Nibs is winning. Love this character.
ReplyDeleteThanks, he's a handful, but a delightful guy to have on your side.
DeleteHaha!! I was so pulled into the visual, I forgot to even look at the writing. What Cara said. Great job of writing clipped sentences to bring the action to life. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Teresa. I'm glad it works : )
DeleteI'm wondering if the Mara will pick the coin up. Short snippet full of character.
ReplyDeleteGood question. Two souls to torture or a bagful of gold?
DeleteOnly hard part is getting such a tiny bit of this story, and just once a week!
ReplyDeleteThe Mara didn't physically jump out at the coin, did it? The way it's worded I'm a little unsure of that. Still, like all the excerpts from this story, it's thoroughly engaging :D :D
Ah, Marcia good catch. No, his eyes followed it. Some rewording to do : )
DeleteThere you go, making me smile again! Can't get enough of this, Millie! You've created such a fantastic world of characters!
ReplyDeleteThanks Evelyn. I love hanging out there, I'm glad others do too!
DeleteGreat snippet. Is it the shiny money or the fact that it's money that's caught Mara's eye?
ReplyDeleteThe Mara likes the idea of lots of it. Ravyn had already offered him a coin, which he refused, since he'd been promised her soul by the evil "she" who sent him to terrorize her and her mom.
DeleteYeah! I'm glad His Nibs is helping out the heroine. Wasn't entirely sure about him, but I like him no matter what he's up to.
ReplyDeleteHe's generally a help : ) And he's a pleasant little drunk.
DeleteDelightful snippet as our hero rides off into the mist to do more mischief.
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DeleteI know I've missed lots of segments of this story, but I like His Nibs. Somehow, riding a sheep seems perfectly in character. Is he permanently sloshed?
ReplyDeleteHe's a clurichaun. A cousin of the leprechaun. Lore paints him riding sheep and dogs at midnight...and I thought the sheep was funnier. In folk stories, he's many times painted as a surly drunk (and they live in your wine cellar) so I figured he's got a magical liver, and yes, he's permanently sloshed. My Nibs is a nice happy drunk though...so far : )
DeleteI couldn't help but laugh at him being under the influence, and honestly the sheep cracked me up.
ReplyDeleteAll part of his crazy personality...finding him sober would be a challenge.
ReplyDeleteHis Nibs is quite a character in all senses of the word! Drunk or not, he thinks fast...another fun snippet from this tale.
ReplyDeleteLol, impressed how well coordinated he is while being drunk;). Great 8!
ReplyDeleteYou've populated this world with the best characters ever, Millie! I want to visit your imagination for a while---mine's not half as clever!
ReplyDeleteFor a moment, I thought His Nibs was going to have the sheep run at the demon, and hit it with the bag of coins. This is probably a safer approach, though. :)
ReplyDeleteDrunk or not he's a smart. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteNibs rocks. That is all. =D
ReplyDeleteWonderful description! I can so see His Nibs and the red velvet sack jangling with coinzz! Lively and well done snippet!
ReplyDeleteI can imagine the Mara eyeing that coin as if that will make it jump up into a pocket. Love His Nibs speech patterns.
ReplyDeleteGold! Totally unplanned, but I was listening to Gold by Sir Sly (...pocket full of yellow, yellow...) when I read your snippet! ;) Excellent post.
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