A to Z Challenge

Saturday, May 10, 2014

WeWriWa - "You're safe now, mama."

It's a special day, it's Mother's Day and Weekend Writing Warriors to boot!  I welcome you to my humble blog to share this special day!  If you don't know what Weekend Writing Warrior's are all about, please click the above link.  I'm keeping it short and sweet as today is a busy day, and we all have lots to do.  Us mom's need to be pampered and fawned over, and of course we all need to give our mom's some loving.

I skipped ahead a bit in the story to sort of match the Mother's Day theme.  We pick up close to where we left off...The Mara has scooped up a golden coin, accepting His Nibs offer.  We pick up with His Nibs in action!

He spurred the sheep hard racing away from the campsite, hooting and hollering, while tossing coins over his shoulder.
The Mara turned its glowing eyes on Ravyn, and she shivered, brushing away the goosebumps that raced up her arms.  Then, he turned and scrabbled across the ground, scooping up the fallen gold, chasing down the plucky clurichaun.

Ravyn collapsed in a pile on the ground.  She looked over at her sleeping mother, blonde hair framing soft pale cheeks.  Ravyn curled up against her, draping her arm around Lareina, “You’re safe now, mama.”  His Nib’s hooting laugh echoed through the trees, and Ravyn smiled.  They certainly had been lucky this night.  

As it is Mother's Day, I will do my best to get to as many folks as possible today.  But, I may have to hit a few of you up in the next couple days.  Part of my time today is going to be spent on the road, so I can go give my Mom-in-law some love and appreciation.  She sure did raise a wonderful man, just perfect-like, all for me : )  Have a wonderful day full of love and appreciation!


17 comments:

  1. I must have missed the part where we learned who/what the Mara is, but I'm guessing it's not an ideal campsite guest :) Good job it seems to be distracted by gold.

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  2. Fine details and narrative flow, Millie. Great stuff, as ever!

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  3. Very nice! Great writing and use of active verbs. Short and punchy, but descriptive.

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  4. Glad they got through that, but from the last line I guess there's more ahead? That would make me want more. Hope you get lots of pampering today. Where I am, Mother's Day was last week so it's just an ordinary Sunday for me. Great snippet!

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  5. Tempting her with with gold and coin can lead to greed. Interesting theme going on.

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  6. Another great scene. I hope His Nibs comes back. He was growing on me.

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  7. His Nibs saved the day! Happy Mother's Day, Millie. :-)

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  8. Thank goodness they escaped that particular bout of trouble! Exciting snippet.

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  9. What kind of spurs does he use to keep them from getting tangled in the wool?

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  10. They were lucky and His Nibs thinks fast on his feet. Altogether a fun little episode! Great snippet!

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  11. Way to go, His Nibs! Glad he's leading that nasty nightmare monster away.

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  12. It surprised me that the Mara is male, but not in a bad way---I liked that detail.

    Thank heavens for His Nibs! :D

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  13. Ravyn knew that the Mara's greed for the gold coins was enough. Well done.
    And a fantastic piece to post on Mother's Day, thank you.

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  14. Aww, I love this! Excellent selection for Mother's Day. :) You always manage to make me smile, one way or another.

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  15. *laff* Another amazing excerpt! This is so cool because you have the fanciful His Nibs, a creepy shadow-creature, then we end on a sweet note. All in so few sentences. Fantabulous, Millie.

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  16. Brilliant how you themed your wewriwa, Millie!

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